Wording on hour change letter

[BlueRose]

Thank you all. I have a habit of being wordy.

Seems harsh to me.

Maybe re word so it's a little more friendlier. " due to late drop offs... " " in order to maintain consistency in my program for the benefit of all children... "

Just a thought. I know if I was going to a daycare that came out with this memo I would be moving on. It's not the hours that would make me move on, it would be the tone in which it was written. It almost feels like someones done something wrong so you're coming down on everyone.

I was afraid of that. I do have one family that is dropping off whenever they feel like it and tries to pick up during quiet time. The kid is also a screamer. They are with an agency so its not that easy to get rid of them. Was hoping this would push them out the door, but I don't want to lose my other clients. I will reword it.

[cfred]

I'm going to sound like a total snob as I say this, but here goes....

Spell check! Get someone who's good with that kind of thing to go over it and make sure there aren't any boo boos. Your computer's spell check function is fine for spelling, but won't tell you if you've used the wrong word, etc. I'm quite good with that kind of thing and have been cocky in the past, sending something out without a thorough edit. Big mistake! Improper grammar, spelling, punctuation, etc, looks unprofessional. It's much easier to fix it before it's sent out. I spotted a few boo boos in your draft (it's a terrible habit of mine) that you definitely want to fix before firing it off to clients.

[apples and bananas]

Thank you all. I have a habit of being wordy.


I was afraid of that. I do have one family that is dropping off whenever they feel like it and tries to pick up during quiet time. The kid is also a screamer. They are with an agency so its not that easy to get rid of them. Was hoping this would push them out the door, but I don't want to lose my other clients. I will reword it.

You could always word it one way for this specific family and another way for the rest. LOL I've done that before. I've sent out a memo and made it look like everyone got it, but really, it was only given to one person as it was only one person that it effected.